Welcome! This we we're writing to the word prompt "die." I have more of Marty and Jen's story in an excerpt of "Too Late for Goodbye." When you're finished, hop on over to the wonderful works by the other authors. Find them HERE.
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“Guys, you remember Mr. McKay from Pine Grove, don’t you?”
“Please call me Marty.”
“Is Marty coming home with us?” Ethan asked.
“He is. And staying for dinner. We’re having stew.”
“Oh boy, stew!” Sophie clapped her hands together.
“Will you pitch to me when we get home?” Ethan asked.
“Sure. You trying out for Little League?”
“Yeah.”
“Then you need to practice.” When they arrived back at
the house, Marty stepped back and let the others enter first. The kids ran
ahead to the kitchen. The plate of brownies to die for awaited.
Jen went to the refrigerator. “Milk?” She met his gaze
with her pretty blues.
“Sure.”
“Goes great with brownies.” Ethan took down glasses
and Jen poured.
Marty couldn’t remember the last time he’d drunk a
glass of milk. What the hell was he doing? Staying at her house after their
meeting? Accepting an invitation to dinner?
He could hear his brother’s words already.
“What the hell are you doing, Marty?
She’s got two kids. Somebody else’s kids. I get you want to sleep with her but
do it and leave.”
However, Marty didn’t want to leave. He liked brownies
and milk. Sure, she’s as hot as beach sand at high noon, but she’s simply so
goddamn nice as well. Nice wears well, it lives well. You could still love nice
a hundred years from now.
Stop getting ahead of yourself. Have a good time and don’t overthink it, like you usually do. He vowed to listen to his inner self this time.
Love the way his mind works and the simile as beach sand at high noon. Great scene.
ReplyDeleteHe sounds quite smitten! Wonderful snippet.
ReplyDeleteLove the image- hot as beach sand at high noon. It's endearing how he's physically drawn to her but also drawn to the kids, brownies, and "nice" aspects of the situation.
ReplyDeleteI love this scene. Especially ' hot as beach sand at high noon'. Great description! And I loved being able to peek i at his thoughts which seem to be running well ahead of him. Nice snippet!
ReplyDeleteAh. I love that he’s falling for all of them. Hopefully he stops listening to his inner voice. Great job!
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