Welcome. Life took over last week and I couldn't post. But I'm back this week. We return to the work-in-progress, tentatively titled, "Too Late for Goodbye."
Jackie
stared back and forth from one to the other. She recognized a physical
resemblance but had no memory of them. Pain like she had never known seared her
body.
“Mom?
Dad?”
“Mama
and Pop,” Bill corrected.
As if he
had placed a puzzle piece in her brain, the sound of his voice and the
nicknames reverberated in her head, brought their names back to her. She
nodded.
“Yes. I
remember those names.”
“That’s
us,” Betty said in a low voice.
“What happened to you, sweetheart?” Bill
probed.
“I don’t
know.” She swallowed, surprised she was still upset to admit that after so many
months of explaining again and again that she hadn’t a clue.
“Oh my
God,” Betty’s fingers flew to her mouth and she turned to her husband and
sobbed.
“Can you
come with us, Ms. Tremont? I think we can clear some of this up and you can go
home with your family.” The officer motioned her to follow.
After
two hours at the police station, Jackie was released into the custody of the
Tremonts. The investigators instructed her to call them the moment she
recollected anything at all. The earnest looks on their faces gave them
credibility. They had been most kind through her ordeal. Jackie promised to get
back in touch if her memory returned. She thanked everyone in the station house
for their kindness and care.
After a
tearful farewell with Angela, Jackie slid into the backseat of the older couple’s
car. Fear and emotion had tugged at her all day, exhausting her. She slept most
of the way back to Pine Grove. Once they arrived, after settling her in her old
room, her parents showed her pictures of them together in happier times. Jackie
believed that they were her family. A tension she’d been holding for a long
time melted and flowed out of her. She’d have to get to know them again, but
that would be okay. At least she had a family.
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Great snippet. Let's hope it'll all work out for her.
ReplyDeleteYou've certainly piqued my curiosity. I want more. Well done.
ReplyDeleteHow intriguing! I can't wait for more of your story and to find out what happened to her.
ReplyDeleteI don't think I've read a story where the main character has memory loss. Interesting concept, excited to see how it develops.
ReplyDeleteSuch a great snippet. I can't wait to read more!
ReplyDeleteGreat new story! I can't wait to read more and find out what happened...and what the future holds.
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